tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3315861630765119669.post1202011021794198643..comments2024-03-10T10:34:02.181+02:00Comments on The Alliterative Allomorph: As I promised yesterday ...Jessica Bellhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10889900730906728317noreply@blogger.comBlogger27125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3315861630765119669.post-54625067348034597942010-05-12T19:42:13.258+03:002010-05-12T19:42:13.258+03:00Pass the "Duh" moment award to me please...Pass the "Duh" moment award to me please. I just realized this was a memoir and you had given me a glimpse into your life. I have a feeling we may share similiar stories. (Hugs)IndigoSage Ravenwoodhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17143502548162174269noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3315861630765119669.post-87768763050788284832010-05-12T19:39:08.991+03:002010-05-12T19:39:08.991+03:00Immense improvement. I felt your characters. You p...Immense improvement. I felt your characters. You put me in the room with them. Loved this version. (Hugs)IndigoSage Ravenwoodhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17143502548162174269noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3315861630765119669.post-36244136192939308032010-05-12T17:13:49.903+03:002010-05-12T17:13:49.903+03:00You are talented :)You are talented :)Sugarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01847639596079213091noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3315861630765119669.post-88801134487726267592010-05-12T08:47:05.958+03:002010-05-12T08:47:05.958+03:00The first one was good but yeah, this really broug...The first one was good but yeah, this really brought it to light. Well done Ms.Fab. :)Shannonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11640509596922335617noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3315861630765119669.post-55137494844235254762010-05-12T01:36:08.501+03:002010-05-12T01:36:08.501+03:00I loved it!!! I just really like how I'm not s...I loved it!!! I just really like how I'm not sure where you're going...so fresh!! Jealous of your fluidity as I've stated before and the only thing, that's so minor I should shut my trap but I would want you to tell me is...three-day old dirty sweaty bodies read awkward to me---Maybe go with our three day old festering stench or something to that effect!!!<br /><br />Fave lines (cause you have so many good ones in this piece) is-Mary's Little lambs...poodle poop and perfume...tip of her finger went a sweaty shade of white and red.... and the description of the wall paper. You really accomplished realistic and believable action to state the main point of your mother being so overbearing and insatiable! You go girl!!!angelarenehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13639436719051155045noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3315861630765119669.post-22420943600195216252010-05-12T00:16:36.983+03:002010-05-12T00:16:36.983+03:00Wow, thanks for posting this. I enjoyed the first ...Wow, thanks for posting this. I enjoyed the first but this one was awesome. :)Lindsayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04313619484424363895noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3315861630765119669.post-48873669070216005912010-05-11T22:55:36.953+03:002010-05-11T22:55:36.953+03:00I liked the first one, but this one is so much str...I liked the first one, but this one is so much stronger. Really good writing!Talli Rolandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04780882465745107715noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3315861630765119669.post-38869091142345200452010-05-11T20:44:39.084+03:002010-05-11T20:44:39.084+03:00I agree with Alesa's French corrections. This ...I agree with Alesa's French corrections. This is great! Thanks for sharing!Lydia Kanghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00484415427764822386noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3315861630765119669.post-354375901056441362010-05-11T19:21:03.624+03:002010-05-11T19:21:03.624+03:00I really enjoyed this. It was great and though I ...I really enjoyed this. It was great and though I loved the version yesterday, this one underscores the showing as opposed to telling. Great!Annhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07524878248746427258noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3315861630765119669.post-12249956936424606252010-05-11T19:02:25.477+03:002010-05-11T19:02:25.477+03:00It's so much fun to read both ways of telling ...It's so much fun to read both ways of telling the story. I like them both a lot, and I'm still laughing about that whole being chased out of the hotel thing. I mean, in real life, it'd be terrifying, but it's fun to read. :) <br />Also, this isn't a grammar thing, and it's obviously your choice as the author, but I've never heard a French person apologize for not speaking English. Most of the time they either say, "a little," or, "Non."<br />:) But Nice is in the south, so it may be different, I don't know.Bethany Elizabethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12829932931010851406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3315861630765119669.post-20842908018982811462010-05-11T19:02:19.415+03:002010-05-11T19:02:19.415+03:00You are so talented. I loved reading this and I wi...You are so talented. I loved reading this and I will have to go check out your other version. Loved it, thanks for sharing!Julie Daohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13814052162359300933noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3315861630765119669.post-59874784178737993212010-05-11T18:36:25.538+03:002010-05-11T18:36:25.538+03:00Nice!! This one is incredible. I loved it! Thanks ...Nice!! This one is incredible. I loved it! Thanks for sharing!B. Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10112783922833164491noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3315861630765119669.post-4696919476322203362010-05-11T17:40:11.151+03:002010-05-11T17:40:11.151+03:00LOL, Matthew. Yes I think it has. Strange isn'...LOL, Matthew. Yes I think it has. Strange isn't it? It doesn't seem that short. Go ahead! Split your comments into two ;)Jessica Bellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10889900730906728317noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3315861630765119669.post-4838796700295393652010-05-11T17:37:36.558+03:002010-05-11T17:37:36.558+03:00I may have to start commenting twice - since you a...I may have to start commenting twice - since you are friggin awesome!Matthew MacNishhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03264738483763244969noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3315861630765119669.post-69801830218758495182010-05-11T17:36:57.156+03:002010-05-11T17:36:57.156+03:00Wow great update Jessica, this one really sings! I...Wow great update Jessica, this one really sings! I didn't think the first was that bad, but this is better.<br /><br />Unrelated - how am I not one of your top commentors? I comment every day. Has it really been less than seventeen days since I started following you? If so that's crazy.Matthew MacNishhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03264738483763244969noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3315861630765119669.post-5148334701739275242010-05-11T16:30:58.403+03:002010-05-11T16:30:58.403+03:00If you want my opinion I think it's great.
Ta...If you want my opinion I think it's great.<br /><br />Take care.<br />Yvonne.RHYTHM AND RHYMEhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11386975261804630799noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3315861630765119669.post-17765842109423318212010-05-11T16:19:25.812+03:002010-05-11T16:19:25.812+03:00Well done! I love that you posted both pieces to s...Well done! I love that you posted both pieces to show the difference. While I liked the first one, this one proved the point that showing is better.Jaydee Morganhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01069805915071090479noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3315861630765119669.post-44359134803492461972010-05-11T16:07:20.277+03:002010-05-11T16:07:20.277+03:00You never cease to blow my mind. Fantastic!
*wants...You never cease to blow my mind. Fantastic!<br />*wants to be you*Candylandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08956196611348299424noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3315861630765119669.post-88037648691375933592010-05-11T15:30:39.323+03:002010-05-11T15:30:39.323+03:00You're quite welcome!
I just looked up greek...You're quite welcome!<br /> <br />I just looked up greek punctuation. Interesting... the semicolon and the question mark! The history behind the development is interesting too...<br />More to read when I get home tonight. : jAvohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15808959359850145003noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3315861630765119669.post-82715265538826507212010-05-11T15:23:57.161+03:002010-05-11T15:23:57.161+03:00No problem, alesa :) I figured that as they puncut...No problem, alesa :) I figured that as they puncutate differently in Greek too :) Thanks again!Jessica Bellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10889900730906728317noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3315861630765119669.post-54833221841267169962010-05-11T15:22:05.657+03:002010-05-11T15:22:05.657+03:00I realize after the fact that my punctuation remar...I realize after the fact that my punctuation remark might seem cryptic... <br />They punctuate differently in french. For instance they put spaces in front of questions marks. <br />I didn't do that because this piece isn't targeting french people. : j Cheers.Avohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15808959359850145003noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3315861630765119669.post-83998188655174800852010-05-11T15:20:40.522+03:002010-05-11T15:20:40.522+03:00Awesome, Alesa! Thanks a million!!!!Awesome, Alesa! Thanks a million!!!!Jessica Bellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10889900730906728317noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3315861630765119669.post-6926538663903323712010-05-11T15:04:10.971+03:002010-05-11T15:04:10.971+03:00Automatic translation... Ick. ; j
Pet peeve. I tra...Automatic translation... Ick. ; j<br />Pet peeve. I translate for a living. Here are my corrections for your french. I also left the English punctuation. There was one tiny typo in the English.<br /><br />Proofing set aside, this was a fun read! Kinda reminded me of John Irving and the time I spent working the reception of a small hotel... Thanks for sharing!<br />------<br />The little old man shook his head, “Désolé, je ne parle pas *anglais.”<br /><br />“Christ. Give it back. We’ll still be standing her*e tomorrow morning if I leave it up to you.” <br /><br />“Bon*. Comment voudriez-vous payer*?” <br />---(this is grammatically correct but not used much anymore, maybe the old man is very formal when he is ticked off, if not he would have said "Comment voulez-vous payer?")<br /><br />“Vingt franc*s par nuit,” he replied. <br /><br />“Pardon? Vous ne l'aimez pas?*” <br />---(This is grammatically correct, but a bit weird. In eng, it would translate to "I’m sorry, what? You don’t like it?" Don’t like what? The price? The room? Maybe "Pardon? Vous changez d’avis?" Which would be " I’m sorry, what? You’re changing your mind?" <br /><br />“J’ai été obligé de* vous montrer chaque pièce dans l'hôtel! Et maintenant vous changez d’avis? Vous êtes cons ou quoi*?” (Much more idiomatic, and likely given the circumstances)Avohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15808959359850145003noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3315861630765119669.post-25190141491763915632010-05-11T14:58:19.434+03:002010-05-11T14:58:19.434+03:00I am glad you shared both versions. This one is so...I am glad you shared both versions. This one is so much better than the previous one - and works better in the context too, I guess.Natashahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00481081735923606868noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3315861630765119669.post-36416523416619955662010-05-11T14:50:04.002+03:002010-05-11T14:50:04.002+03:00The talent is spilling off the page! I love it!! T...The talent is spilling off the page! I love it!! Thanks for sharing it all! <br /><br />I'm so excited about tomorrow! I'm ready to post!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03667521490706435608noreply@blogger.com