So I've written a press release for the soundtrack to String Bridge as I'm planning to push it here in Greece separately from the book as well. I've never had to write press material for music myself before, my mother always did it, being the experienced band manager in the family (she managed her own band). So I'd love your opinions! Those with music industry experience, don't be afraid to tell me it's crap ... :o)
PS: A writing skills book I wrote for English Language Teaching was just delivered to my door and I'm a tad excited about that too. I don't usually get excited over ELT stuff I've written, but there's something about this book that puts a little sparkle in my eye. Probably has to do with the wonderful editor I worked with at Hellenic American Union. So, thanks, Vicky! :o)
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PS: A writing skills book I wrote for English Language Teaching was just delivered to my door and I'm a tad excited about that too. I don't usually get excited over ELT stuff I've written, but there's something about this book that puts a little sparkle in my eye. Probably has to do with the wonderful editor I worked with at Hellenic American Union. So, thanks, Vicky! :o)
I like it. And I love your picture!
ReplyDeleteIt sounds great to me!
ReplyDeleteI like this! However, I would leave out the years of the bands and the work. You could probably leave out the length of time for spAnk and why it no longer worked as well. These two parts are dry and bog down the reader because they read a bit too much like a job resume. Hope that makes sense. :)
ReplyDeleteMelissa, I see your point there, but I do want it to be clear that I'm not just any old lass who suddenly decided to pick up a guitar and bash out a couple of tunes. Want to show some history there. If you've got any alternative suggestions on how to show that, fire away! :o)
ReplyDeleteI personally love it. I have of course have no musical background so I can't offer expertise, however I enjoyed the extra little tidbits of your musical experience, it led me to want to pick up the book more... (even if I've already read it, lol).
ReplyDeleteLove the picture of you! You're gorgeous!
I've never seen a music press release before, so it sounds good to me. You're lucky to have your mom as a resource. :D
ReplyDeleteVery professional. Nice picture too.
ReplyDeleteI love it. There is so much flavor in this, if that makes sense. I really like all the band names, too. Awesome!
ReplyDeleteSounds logical to me, Karen. I'll give it a whirl :o)
ReplyDeleteI think it's excellent and your picture is beautiful also.
ReplyDeleteYvonne.
I think this looks great--I think Melissa's point is good--I hear you on wanting to establish yourself as a musician that has been around and working, but I think VAGUE on years and why it stopped might read a little more smoothly. Saying what you DID is great... but there, I think the 'what' is enough, and then the specifics just on the 'most recently...'
ReplyDeleteThe other thing is your very first sentence--the header--would read most smoothly as two sentences... at 'which' I would put a period and start with 'The album' (do they still call them albums?)--I just don't think you want to lead off with that complex a sentence. [I haven't done music, but have done PR]
Looks good to me! And I love your pic. :)
ReplyDeleteWow, it's really, really great! Good luck!
ReplyDeleteThe only thing I'd change is the beginning where you talk about your mother. I think you have enough music experience in this that you don't need to add your mother's to it.
ReplyDeleteThe connection will be good though here in Greece. There are quite a few Hard Candy fanatics in Athens believe it or not!
ReplyDeleteIt looks good to me! Except for the font used in the album title. It may just be the way it displays on my monitor, and it would look better as a hard copy, but it's hard for me to read.
ReplyDeleteImpressive and professional!
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ReplyDeleteOver all good. I do agree with those who felt the first paragraph could use some revision. Delete "semi-famous" and hype yourself and experience. Readers don't need to know anything remotely negative about your previous band experience--just say what it was and don't necessarily date anything.
ReplyDeleteThe change in fonts also caught my attention. It looks kind of cool, but for a press release it might be a little too gimmicky.
I think you're gonna do well with the upcoming releases. This is exciting.
Lee
Tossing It Out
My God, you're a busy gal! It looks good to me - I wonder if you need to put a quote in there from you, so papers can just lift one directly from there instead of ringing you up.
ReplyDeleteI think it’s all a great idea. I do however agree with some of the comments already made. Maybe you could say your group were together for a number of years?
ReplyDeleteAlso, for what it’s worth, perhaps instead of saying Hard Candy were/are semi-famous, you could describe them as successful?
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Good luck with everything.
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Agree with Arlee about semi-famous, use renowned or something similar, especially if you half expect people to know who they are in Athens.
ReplyDeleteFor what Melissa said about Spank, the over-explanation of the band dissolving, could be replaced with the date you moved to greece, thus giving a finite amount of time for spank and resolving the issue.
Also that picture makes you look like one bad mama jama. :)
Oh! So excited. It's all coming together. *sigh*
ReplyDeleteI agree with Matt about the font - it looks a bit fuzzy, kind of cartoonish. Otherwise, sounds great. I'd buy it...if I wasn't already going to :-) xo
hi miss jessica! i love anything you do cause i love YOU! :)
ReplyDelete...big hugs from lenny
attaboy, girl! :O lol
ReplyDeleteI think it looks great, Jessica! :-)
ReplyDeletehey, girl. We can totally tighten and pump this up. If you want, I'll rearrange some sentences this p.m. and send it over. Yes? ((hugs))
ReplyDeleteLove it...but yes, tighten it up.
ReplyDeleteLooks good to me. I'm no music expert, but I do like to write, except when I get "your" and "you're"
ReplyDeletemixed up...:) lol
Have a great week!
Karen
P.S. Congrats!
It looks great to me, Jessica! Great job :)
ReplyDeleteIt looks professional and very, very cool.
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I love it.
i don't know jack about press releases but it looks great to me. Very professional
ReplyDeletePut the stuff in your third paragraph first, Jess. That's your unique selling proposition and your hook. Don't bury it.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Melissa, you don't need to explain why the band didn't work.
ReplyDeleteAnd I think you can eliminate the "But" at the opening of the third paragraph.
Other than that, it sounds great!
Thanks for all your comments!!! I shall be incorporating many a suggestion. Couldn't live without you guys ... :o)
ReplyDeleteI love it :) Looks very professional. Good luck getting it out there!
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I'm late, late, late to this - but just throwing my tuppence to the wind, I'd take out 'semi-famous' completely - as either folk will know the band (hence they will think famous anyway) or they won't have heard of it - hence semi-famous is redundant. Apart from that it all reads marvellously - tons of good luck to you. :)
ReplyDeleteLooks great Jessica! A few of the 'while's might seem a bit repetitive? Also, I think you should spell out Athens, Greece the first time you mention it, and then just Athens after that. Two tiny nits, sorry about that!
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